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This is my take on the "doubt" theme. Bear in mind i haven't wrtten poetry since middle school so this might sound very choppy. So sorry if I make you want to pull your brain from your skull xD [by the way I love that doubt poem up at the top, but I was too lazy to quote] Anyways here it is:

 

 

Flimsy fingers.

Curling and wrapping around a conscience;

Teasing and prodding;

But fleeting and wavering like a summer storm.

 

Haughty eyes.

Challenging with their questions;

Fueling the indecision;

Warping the already feeble truths.

 

Dragging feet.

Slowing and pulling to an abstract state;

Like the confines of a fleeting dream;

Threatening to enter the abyss of doubt forever.

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I don't have much to say on your first poem, but this second one...it's clearly very bitter. On first reading this, and I don't mean this in a bad way, but it sounded like a certain Paramore song, Misery Business...it has the same kind of attitude.

 

Heh I don't mind. Anyone who thinks that a little bitterness is a bad thing is denying a part of human nature in my opinion! At least I'm getting out my negative feelings in a poem and not going after the person who it is about like some people would! That's my take on it anyway.

 

I felt better after getting it all out anyway. I don't like Paramore so don't know the song, looked up the lyrics and see what you mean...I guess most girls feel like they've encountered a girl like that at some point.

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Heh I don't mind. Anyone who thinks that a little bitterness is a bad thing is denying a part of human nature in my opinion! At least I'm getting out my negative feelings in a poem and not going after the person who it is about like some people would! That's my take on it anyway.

 

I felt better after getting it all out anyway. I don't like Paramore so don't know the song, looked up the lyrics and see what you mean...I guess most girls feel like they've encountered a girl like that at some point.

 

Oh absolutely, good to get it out in a poem! I just look back at many of my bitter poems and think they're awful. :LOL: I look at them and think how silly it was to think that way since I'm often so strangled with emotion I think radically. So in a way it's good to get it down and look back on it and mature in a way.

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I see a lot of love poets on this forum.

 

Yep we're all loved up!!

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The Next Step.

 

 

He pulled it against his head and took a breath,

 

Heard life around him as precious as she is,

 

The colours beamed and faded simultaneously,

 

The despair that took over and warped him

 

Was the only thing he met that moment

 

And the one thing he desired to be way from.

 

The torment of the past pierced his soft skull

 

Into his fantasy worlds, into his eyes and lungs.

 

He questioned it one more time, one last chance

 

But then again, why bother to stop this boring?

 

He took the last breath , a lost breath,

 

And gave himself the answer after this life.

 

 

 

In a split second, the bullet touched his head,

 

Drilled it like a million desperate leaches,

 

An ocean of tears drowning his now hollow life.

 

Everything was extremely light and then heavy,

 

Dark, empty, a second that dragged forever

 

As the bullet caved deeper into his brain,

 

Erasing all as it went by, gentle like a spider.

 

A burning pain was painted over all his senses,

 

But a relief also covered his open wounds and scars.

 

He bled his life out through a small whole

 

From which Death sucked all his memories.

 

 

 

Filipe Dumas, 15 de Janeiro de 2008

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No, we're all very horny and deprived. Different thing. :(

 

Oh yeah, you're right:(

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Our Wee House

 

I would like a plastic house.

I'd sip some plastic tea.

I'll marry an icky girl, I guess,

And she would live with me.

 

We'd have a lovely honeymoon,

We might even have kids!

I would do a hard day's work

And she'd give me a kiss.

 

We'd have spaghetti every night,

And then you'd clean it up.

We'd sit at home and watch TV,

And she would drink some wine.

 

Then we'd go to bed I guess

Though I'm not sure why.

I'll come back around tomorrow

And we'll do it all again.

 

After a while, we will get bored,

Cos I don't play it properly.

I'd put spaghetti on the door,

And then we'd have a fight.

 

I'd throw the plastic plates about,

And run away from you.

Our plastic house just fell apart,

It was made from plastic walls.

 

LM, Jan 2009

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Our Wee House

 

I would like a plastic house.

I'd sip some plastic tea.

I'll marry an icky girl, I guess,

And she would live with me.

 

We'd have a lovely honeymoon,

We might even have kids!

I would do a hard day's work

And she'd give me a kiss.

 

We'd have spaghetti every night,

And then you'd clean it up.

We'd sit at home and watch TV,

And she would drink some wine.

 

Then we'd go to bed I guess

Though I'm not sure why.

I'll come back around tomorrow

And we'll do it all again.

 

After a while, we will get bored,

Cos I don't play it properly.

I'd put spaghetti on the door,

And then we'd have a fight.

 

I'd throw the plastic plates about,

And run away from you.

Our plastic house just fell apart,

It was made from plastic walls.

 

LM, Jan 2009

 

I love it, although it is a little close to home right now!

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I wrote this in school today when I came across my love interest, who wasn't particularly interested. I couldn't write what I was feeling, so I wrote about that instead.

 

Failed Attempt.

 

Suddenly blown out of focus, I detract.

Surely and only, I can write my opus.

In fact, pushed only by brown wisps and

A certain lisp, am I brought to song.

And I think long and only this comes.

Between bliss and pathetic sadness,

Comes less of a song, more a state,

Of lines thought of too late, I wonder,

If this gate of time is wasted on you.

But I have lasted, so please wait.

Be at ease, for there is hope for us.

I am but dope, I waste time on this,

And so sayest me of this blur.

A pathetic kiss unattainable or caused

By a simple pause, a tick or gait.

For I like simple, a simple song.

But on too long, I'll keep you not.

It has come to naught, I cannot do it.

Cannot bring throat to bark, or sing.

I will park third in this love race.

Enamoured by her bitten thumb,

I drop my pen, and nothing comes.

 

LM Feb 2009

Edited by New Born Lee

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I wrote this in school today when I came across my love interest, who wasn't particularly interest. I couldn't write what I was feeling, so I wrote about that instead.

 

Failed Attempt.

 

Suddenly blown out of focus, I detract.

Surely and only, I can write my opus.

In fact, pushed only by brown wisps and

A certain lisp, am I brought to song.

And I think long and only this comes.

Between bliss and pathetic sadness,

Comes less of a song, more a state,

Of lines thought of too late, I wonder,

If this gate of time is wasted on you.

But I have lasted, so please wait.

Be at ease, for there is hope for us.

I am but dope, I waste time on this,

And so sayest me of this blur.

A pathetic kiss unattainable or caused

By a simple pause, a tick or gait.

For I like simple, a simple song.

But on too long, I'll keep you not.

It has come to naught, I cannot do it.

Cannot bring throat to bark, or sing.

I will park third in this love race.

Enamoured by her bitten thumb,

I drop my pen, and nothing comes.

 

Aww. :(

 

I love your poetry, Lee. :happy:

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I don't really like it, to be honest. The line 'picture of raping' in particular doesn't work for me- far too explicit compared with the rest of the poem, and plus it's a pretty clumsy line.

 

Also, you spelt 'breathe' wrong. Sorry but a typo ruins a poem, easily distracts.

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Electro Empire

17 APR 08

 

The skies are enveloping within

Forcing the clouds to crawl in

They watch from above

The inhumane love

And unforgiving sting of the wind

 

Hiding behind molecular technology

The pulsating drums negatively pound

Sol Three covers its eyes from the truth

Causing confusion for all on the ground

 

Radical souls reach out to Gods

They forget the past to rationalise the cause

A hole in the universe collapses

Sending all into hysterics

 

They paint our forces black with terror

Galloping horses alive with furor

Ripping apart of the fabric of existence

Gluing together the static of consistence

 

The Backroom Zoo

22 November 2008

 

I was born free in the mind

Before corruption began to climb

We all flew high with our wings outstretched

Famine, depression, and power farfetched

But now our stage is presently aware

Of all the surroundings too delicate to care

Governmental lies and religious fakes

Those who do not care for what this makes

The stories unravel their carpets of red

Inviting you to join their feast of the dead

Waging their wars for sole personal gain

Sixty years of rule, never refrained

The fragile manipulation of your mind

And distrated intoxication not left behind

Like children playing chess with fake wooden pawns

The powerful banks control monetary throngs

Well-oiled machines raring--ready to go

A well-dressed businessman could never say no

Nor, presidents of past have ever been slaves

No, the smiles on dead faces will never fade

When explosives bring down our common enemy

The False Flag band-aid is their remedy

When the heart of the beast has awaken the chance

For the New World Order to continue a romance

Investment frauders orgy mortgage desire

They line their pockets with wild green fire

For the truth of the matter lies not in the age

But beneath the surface, not far from the stage

A haunting ghost forshadowing the effect

Return for the money, a hand to collect

Systematic system and classification prevail

To document lost souls doomed to burn in hell

A light in the sky offers peace in the land

But the light is a rocket, decimating our plan

So when we are tired of suckling from the media

Look up 'terrorist' in an encyclopedia

See the names of all the intelligent crew

Who try to wage war against me and you

Not the bums living in some far off cave

But the ones who have subjected us as slaves

Blinding our judgement with fear-mongering tactics

Like trading with people outsourcing galactics

So if we choose to be free once again

We must force evil off into its bitter end

For we are a kind linked from our essense

And must wrought upon our own convalescence

An instinct of survival too human to ignore

Starting to collapse the cold metal door

If we keep our sense of what was behind

The future will be born free in the mind

 

The first one was inspired by 'Exo-Politics' and takes its name from one of the former names of 'Futurism'. The second one was inspired by the film 'Zeigeist' and Muse's obsession with conspiracy theories.

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-Belonging-

I just want some peace.

Cradle me in your starlit abyss.

If you called me,I would go-

Leave it all behind.

To find peace. The meaning of tranquility...

Rock me in your sea.

Take me home.

 

-Yours-

Twin galaxies and rose petals

Hard and delicate

Shower me with your bold caress

My soul, parched-

wants to belong

... to you?

 

-One-

Breathe in my breath

your soul whispers

in my mind.

Touch your forehead to mine

Can you hear your thoughts echo?

Close your eyes

Breathe me in

Hearts pound.

Fingers clench.

Sigh.

and behold.

The beauty of one.

 

 

Here's a few of mine.. If you like I can post more. :D

-Indigo

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-Belonging-

I just want some peace.

Cradle me in your starlit abyss.

If you called me,I would go-

Leave it all behind.

To find peace. The meaning of tranquility...

Rock me in your sea.

Take me home.

 

-Yours-

Twin galaxies and rose petals

Hard and delicate

Shower me with your bold caress

My soul, parched-

wants to belong

... to you?

 

-One-

Breathe in my breath

your soul whispers

in my mind.

Touch your forehead to mine

Can you hear your thoughts echo?

Close your eyes

Breathe me in

Hearts pound.

Fingers clench.

Sigh.

and behold.

The beauty of one.

 

 

Here's a few of mine.. If you like I can post more. :D

-Indigo

 

Very beautiful, yes post more!!

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-Belonging-

I just want some peace.

Cradle me in your starlit abyss.

If you called me,I would go-

Leave it all behind.

To find peace. The meaning of tranquility...

Rock me in your sea.

Take me home.

 

-Yours-

Twin galaxies and rose petals

Hard and delicate

Shower me with your bold caress

My soul, parched-

wants to belong

... to you?

 

-One-

Breathe in my breath

your soul whispers

in my mind.

Touch your forehead to mine

Can you hear your thoughts echo?

Close your eyes

Breathe me in

Hearts pound.

Fingers clench.

Sigh.

and behold.

The beauty of one.

 

 

Here's a few of mine.. If you like I can post more. :D

-Indigo

 

These are quite nice! :)

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Thanks for the positive feedback guys. :) Here are some more.

 

-Writing-

Cleansing breath of thought on page.

Meander out of my soul like

a river, winding it's way

'round the universe and back again

To be birthed on a canvass

of white and black.

Covered in stardust and neurons.

 

 

 

-Only-

Only silence here.

Devoid of colour

Devoid of light

Only noise-

Static hum.

Drown it out, drown it out.

There's no depth

I'm in the second dimension

Digging, digging...

Is that all that's left

Of us?

-Guinea Pig-

Watch me.

See me.

Take what's mine is yours

-I can't stop you.

Long fingers;

grasping- probing

Take what you came for

-I can't stop you.

From star light;

Steel in the night

steal in the night.

-I can't stop you.

Would I if i could?

Is it for the greater good?

 

 

-Indigo

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This should sound something like Marilyn Manson's The Beautiful People (Antichrist Superstar, 1996), with a more ambiental texture, if put into a song.

 

 

 

The Trap

 

 

The pretty boxes out there are calling us,

 

Their colours and lights want to eat us

 

And we’re flying like stupid culicidaes

 

Like if there were no other ways.

 

 

 

We cut off our hands and they can reach us,

 

They know how to take our brains from us

 

And we suicide like horny spiders.

 

Who’s the martyr here anyway?

 

 

 

Filipe Dumas, 10 de Fevereiro de 2009

Edited by FilipeDumas

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I don't claim to be a poet, however i do write some stuff every now and again... I don't usually write things that rhyme... Sometimes a bit of Haiku...Anyway i wrote this and it seems to rhyme... And i like it... So i thought i would share it...

 

Her.

 

Everyday she sits

Under the willow tree

Through narrowed slits

I want her just for me

 

This strange floating thing

Oblivious to my stare

She begins to sing

Sunlight glitters on her hair

 

A tortured tear

Slides down my cheek

Nothing but fear

I cannot Speak

 

For this delicate creature

Shall never even know

I love her every feature

Like moonlight on the snow

 

A feeling such as this

I dare not deign describe

A pure slice of bliss

Now my heart does writhe

 

What is this small hope

Of which i grab hold

Her head turns toward me

With eyes of pure gold

 

...Yep thats it... I guess we all want things we can't have... :)

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