Dragondust Posted August 10, 2012 Share Posted August 10, 2012 cool thanks for letting me know! I'll try to work on it a little more maybe attempt to make it a little less confusing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
diamond_writer Posted August 10, 2012 Share Posted August 10, 2012 cool thanks for letting me know! I'll try to work on it a little more maybe attempt to make it a little less confusing! You're welcome. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragondust Posted August 10, 2012 Share Posted August 10, 2012 A Scratch on the Surface Washing away the rain falling into the sky as these cloudy days surround me Weary of the night The day brings a healing wind as it flows through As you appear again the thorns loosen their hold A hold that once held so tight drops from my soul dripped from their sharp and cruel knives only just now becoming a scratch on the surface with barely a wound to see k so I rewrote it...it is worse or better? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
diamond_writer Posted August 10, 2012 Share Posted August 10, 2012 A Scratch on the Surface Washing away the rain falling into the sky as these cloudy days surround me Weary of the night The day brings a healing wind as it flows through As you appear again the thorns loosen their hold A hold that once held so tight drops from my soul dripped from their sharp and cruel knives only just now becoming a scratch on the surface with barely a wound to see k so I rewrote it...it is worse or better? Better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragondust Posted August 10, 2012 Share Posted August 10, 2012 very awesome!Thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
paranoiawilldestroy Posted August 14, 2012 Share Posted August 14, 2012 Theory Bright, vital diamonds burst within this dimension Leaking light through the heavens of far off skies Just as on my own eyes shine fiery conflagrations Withered though they are by the ravages of time. Too long and winding, wracked with the pain Of my body’s Judas cells doing battle Without the roar of cannon or bullet or flame Soon though my breath shall close to the ultimate rattle. I have long pondered this moment And would wish Whilst I lie, torn and broken Awaiting Death’s bony kiss To think that I may give hope To those who walk the path Whose minds might choke On dark doom inspired by decadence or wrath. There is a force Undulating like the blue seas It follows no course And can never be seen. Its purpose I cannot know It resides in each of us In its embrace we shall grow Like the caterpillar in the chrysalis. Our world has laws too strange to describe The force a farmer; spilling bright seeds in tilled furrows As my body decomposes, soil is fertilised And a new form shall my essence borrow. By essence I describe all the feelings I hold Sweet joy, justified sorrows and radiant rage Of all the things in me that I have no control Sustaining me and more throughout my days. The force that drives the rabbit to peek from its warren Initiates the wolf to seek dancing deer Its wind powers swift sparrows that alight in your garden I know now that there is nothing to fear. Maybe tentacles instead of hands Or a fox or an elephant or a tree Or something from another land Though I shall never again be me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragondust Posted August 15, 2012 Share Posted August 15, 2012 Dreaming This Dance I became time never the same wishing for you to appear Magic casts the shadow my powerful spell After this I become enchanted passed the sorrow of far away As I dream this dance I await near the water I hear it fighting as it seems to float down in it’s misty river Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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