I really like it. Well done, it's beautiful!
I post my poems on http://comptine.tumblr.com
So go there, read, register and like, etc.
Here's one that I've uploaded there:
On the grass
With every cloud that passes by
I think that now’s the time to die
With every bug getting into my hair,
I say it wouldn’t be more than fair
With every straw that tickles me,
I wonder if this is what it is to be
With every darker shade of blue,
I feel the night is the only thing true
With every star reaching my eye,
I realise it’s not time to say goodbye
With every bit of quiet in the city,
I miss my loved ones, and never seeing them again would be a pity
With every star that fades away,
I know there must be a reason to stay,
With every lighter shade of blue,
I realise I need to stick too,
With every bit of sound reaching my ears,
I stand up, walk away, and wipe out my tears
With every step closer to being dead,
I need to live before preparing for what lies ahead
With every bit of hope I can defend,
I refuse to believe this is the end..
Yeah, hope you liked it. Doesn't flow too easily, but depends on how you read it.